Hey guys I slight help here hehehehe. Actually I've application letter format and English CV. I've diseminated it over more than 20 companies and still got no good response today. May I ask all of your help to correct or check my application letter, Does it sounds impolite or not for applying job in some companies

Here is my format letter:

Dear Sir/Madam,


I recently known about career opportunities and I am excited to join PT. XXX.

My name is M and I'm 25 years old. I graduated from ABC University majoring in XYZ science, with GPA 3,19.

With my educational background, I am willing to work and learn more in your company. I am passionate person, have willingness to learn something new and capable of handing any tasks that your company may assign me. I am good in English both written or verbally. I believe that my profesional skills and experiencesI have gained are good starting point for working. I am a person who can work either independently or as a part of a team. I am also a hard worker, open minded and fast learner person. I enjoy communicate with people and built an excellent relation.

I would welcome the opportunity to discuss my credentials with you in person. Herewith I enclose my resume and recent photographs. I will be glad to provide further details when required.
Thank you for your kind attention and I look forward to your favorable reply.

just ignored the bold one

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